Slow Industrial Canal Below

Smith/9th BKLYN, originally uploaded by emilyrems.

Whenever I pass this area just past the Smith/9th St. stop in Brooklyn on my way to my drum lesson with Caryn, I crack up because it reminds me of the Billy Collins poem below. Years ago, my BFF Johanna put a recording of Billy reading it on a mix tape she made for me, back when I was still embroiled in the excruciating world of poetry workshops. The part of this poem where he talks about “the slow industrial canal below” always struck me as especially funny, and I think about it every time I walk past this spot and laugh to myself like a psycho.

Workshop
by Billy Collins

I might as well begin by saying how much I like the title.
It gets me right away because I’m in a workshop now
so immediately the poem has my attention,
like the Ancient Mariner grabbing me by the sleeve.

And I like the first couple of stanzas,
the way they establish this mode of self-pointing
that runs through the whole poem
and tells us that words are food thrown down
on the ground for other words to eat.
I can almost taste the tail of the snake
in its own mouth,
if you know what I mean.

But what I’m not sure about is the voice,
which sounds in places very casual, very blue jeans,
but other times seems standoffish,
professorial in the worst sense of the word
like the poem is blowing pipe smoke in my face.
But maybe that’s just what it wants to do.

What I did find engaging were the middle stanzas,
especially the fourth one.
I like the image of clouds flying like lozenges
which gives me a very clear picture.
And I really like how this drawbridge operator
just appears out of the blue
with his feet up on the iron railing
and his fishing pole jigging—I like jigging—
a hook in the slow industrial canal below.
I love slow industrial canal below. All those l’s.

Maybe it’s just me,
but the next stanza is where I start to have a problem.
I mean how can the evening bump into the stars?
And what’s an obbligato of snow?
Also, I roam the decaffeinated streets.
At that point I’m lost. I need help.

The other thing that throws me off,
and maybe this is just me,
is the way the scene keeps shifting around.
First, we’re in this big aerodrome
and the speaker is inspecting a row of dirigibles,
which makes me think this could be a dream.
Then he takes us into his garden,
the part with the dahlias and the coiling hose,
though that’s nice, the coiling hose,
but then I’m not sure where we’re supposed to be.
The rain and the mint green light,
that makes it feel outdoors, but what about this wallpaper?
Or is it a kind of indoor cemetery?
There’s something about death going on here.

In fact, I start to wonder if what we have here
is really two poems, or three, or four,
or possibly none.

But then there’s that last stanza, my favorite.
This is where the poem wins me back,
especially the lines spoken in the voice of the mouse.
I mean we’ve all seen these images in cartoons before,
but I still love the details he uses
when he’s describing where he lives.
The perfect little arch of an entrance in the baseboard,
the bed made out of a curled-back sardine can,
the spool of thread for a table.
I start thinking about how hard the mouse had to work
night after night collecting all these things
while the people in the house were fast asleep,
and that gives me a very strong feeling,
a very powerful sense of something.
But I don’t know if anyone else was feeling that.
Maybe that was just me.
Maybe that’s just the way I read it.

Billy Collins, “Workshop” from The Art of Drowning. Copyright © 1995 by Billy Collins

4 Responses to “Slow Industrial Canal Below”

  1. jenni Says:

    wow, that sums up my first two years of college! in prose form, it would sum up the last two.

  2. Han Says:

    That’s SO weird that you brought that up, b/c I’ve had the “clouds flying like lozenges” line in my head for weeks now. Totally randomly. Wack!

  3. Han Says:

    P.S. I think you just made me realize that I need to see if I can get this recording of his poems on CD (I had it on tape!)… “The Best Cigarette”… for Emlyn. I would love him to have this poem (and several others) stuck in his little brain early. Am I a bad parent? Most likely.

  4. DevilxJackson Says:

    Great site, I am bookmarking it!Keep it up!
    With the best regards!
    David

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